I'm glad you didn't really rhyme this poem. I don't think the topic would have been as rough and emotional if the lines rhymed. I don't really have any criticism, as the topic is from the heart and you can't ever go wrong when that is true.

The idea of death is quite hard to tackle succesfully in poems but you have done it very well. This is really good, it is quite raw and from the heart. It is also deep and shows a lot of thought and effort has gone into it. (please read and comment on my poems)

That really sounds like a true story and i have tears in my eyes. So many people have to watch people commit suicide and it shouldnt be that way. Great poem. I loved it and it was really was touching. Read and comment on my poems please.

this poem was awesome... it really touched me! you're an awesome writer...keep it up!

hmmm....denna dikt var intressant men jättebra! ja tycke om den! ja bor i finland, men ja är finlandsvensk så ja talar finska och svenska hemma. Ja talar svenska med min pappa och med min mamma talar ja finska. 5/5 för dikten x)
SatuzKa