Shoot these feelings

by Beautiful Disaster   Jul 15, 2008


I wrote this with my friend James :)

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=282110

This kids rapture and this sinister war,
Just shoot these feelings, he can't deal with anymore,
An angel outside, and the devil within,
The battle and war he will try to win

This hatred and fire has been captured in his soul,
In his obscure mind he only has one goal,
Please shoot these feelings he holds inside,
He will step into battle and will no longer have to hide

He doesn't want to leave things to fate
For this pain inside he cannot take
The pain starts all over every time he wakes
All this causing his will to break
He puts everything at stake

His heart begins to race
No longer can he stay in that place
He tries to run and no one can keep up the pace
He's now laughing in their face

I know the angel's heart will shine through
With the feelings so pure and true
From Heaven he was sent with a mission to do
Which left him battered and bruised
But he still protects you

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  • 16 years ago

    by Alexis

    Wow.
    You and James work amazing together...

    I've never read anything like this.
    It's beautiful, the way the words go together...
    and the imagery is perfect.

    5/5

    You two should write more together :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    This hatred and fire he has captured in his soul,

    has been captured*

    This poem has punctuation ADHD. Go back through it and correct the punctuation.

    Other than that it was pretty good. I enjoyed the word usage, although the rhyming in some parts was a tad odd. The concept was creative.

    Overall I'll give this poem a four.

    There is a period in the title...O_o Lol.