by Neme juste un jouet Jul 15, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Catch a tear from the sky |
by Yazdan
Great poem and i loved the ending. At first i was thinking "what does the rain and the blood have to do with the people and jelousy" but the end was really effective at clearing it up. The only thing i is that i might clear up the first bit. It can be a tad confusing to read. It took me a couple read-overs to get it all. Abstract ideas like that require a bit more explanation and taking more time to elaborate on it and let the reader understand easily and fully what you mean makes the rest of the poem so much better. I loved the poem though. The ending is very memorable. Great job |