I really like your opening stanza, I am glad I found this piece, I actually get the visual in my head. I think you did a really nice job. I like the way you ended it as well, I can feel the mania.

First of all, I LOVE THE TITLE. It made me laugh, but I probably shouldn't have.. just my twisted mind making me. ><

Stifling emotion of lips sewn together,
unable to scream, unable to bite.
`` Those lines are so creepy. They're so vivid and just send chills down my spine. I love them, though.

Locked in a closet with no escape,
claustraphobia eating at your mind.
Count to five and back in time,
and hunt for treasures you're not meant to find.
`` Wow, this part almost sounded like a chant. It flowed so well, and still held the haunting atmosphere.

Clawing skin and breaking bone,
fix impurities with oozing blood.
Fix it! Fix it! Fix it! Die.
Black abyss never sounded so good.
`` That third line really made this seem like the continued part of the chant. I absolutely love that line, it's almost frantic.

Amazing job, Gabby! I loooved it! x]

Keep writing!
Cayce

This is wonderful and its imagery is so vivid. On top of that you have managed to use the word 'claustraphobia' without it looking, or sounding forced, now that's good!!

Well done

Michael

That poem is really good

Ack that was freaky O_o" but very well written

**Stifling emotion of lips sewn together,
unable to scream, unable to bite.**
that part, puts an image in your head, with or without wanting to. Unable to scream, and -bite- original.
justs seems like a nightmare.. that you can't get out of..

Hey, your work is very very good!

A very sadistic offering,but wonderful chioce of words. it left me thinking

Wow thats intense
very very good

kiwi

Girl i live that. i miss you amazing poem...

Girl i live that. i miss you amazing poem...

Girl i live that. i miss you amazing poem...

I like the tittle, it caught my eye and made me read it. Your poem really belongs to the dark poems catigory, it is very dark to think like that and sad that people take it as a pleasure to lead a life like that, but at the same time it's comforting for people, it makes them feel redeemed, purified, confident, but it also controls them, it posses them and they find it hard to leave them.