Beautiful write...
Avarice, envy, pride - really they are sin... you have very well described them... personally i think envy is the greatest sin... because of that one could do anything... its really a green monster...its because of envy that greed arises..

wonderful write... and so very true...

keep writing..

Oh wow... This was very well written. You used the most amazing vocabulary ever, and you didn't bore me one bit here. The flow was very smooth and the rhyme was consistant and sounded very good as well. You did a very great job describing "The The Sparks".. very very well. I'm impressed. This poem couldn't have been better. (: 5/5.

Hey great flow, you started off well and kept to the topic nicely and ending it off perfectly.
Flawless and beautifully done :]

keep up the good work!!

5/5

This poem left me speachless it is sad that every bit of it is so true that a mejority of the world are lost in sin and they don't even want to change. The vocabulary was amazing and the rhym added alot to this poem. 5/5

Brillant!Your word choice was great and it flowed perfectly.I love how you ended it in a question.I usually critic poems on any mistakes I see but,honestly,I see none.5/5

--amber--

Wow.. simply wow. You describe these things so perfectly, and the rhythm of the poem just flows so easily.

"The hearts of all have been set on fire.
The greed, hate, and selfishness will never tire.
This is a part of the life we are supposed to live in.
Why bother changing, when they all live in sin?"

This was my absolute favourite part. This could not have been worded more pefectly. You definitely have a contest nomination from me :)

I love philosophic poems and you did a great job with this one.
It was an easy read and did convey its message well I picked up on the rhythm with no effort at all and the words fit the theme perfectly

5/5

At first this was hard to read. But after you get past the first verse (which was good) it all flowed well and the words were the bomb. I am someone who doesnt judge so much as the ryme (even though that is relevant) as the impact and delivery. You did well.

Really good

i really like the little qoute at the bottom

it sounds perfect for the poem
gave it a 5

oh and by the way

its so true