Amazing sad poem! Wow the ending was great I really liked that part about the roses! Good work! Take Care~! Brooke

That story is sad. I hope its not true. It is really good. You have a gift.

You certainly have a gift for poetry...I truly love this one...yes, powerful ending. The whole thing is effective...shows what suicide does to the people who loved the person...and the regrets and guilt felt...and wondering if you could've saved the person and all...and that last part especially was put together beautifully...*tear*

This is my favorite so far.

xxx

"one" should be on (fourth line of the second stanza)
In the thrid stanza take out "again" after love, and take out "too" in the last line and write "again". It might make it flow better.

It is entrestion how this ends, I like the roses... great Idea. But the poem needs work on its flow, this seems like some parts are forced. I just made some suggestions. I dont want to ruin what have done, this has so much potential! Keep working on it!!

~Breeze

Another great poem (no suprise there).
you written it with great emotion and topped it of with him leaving 16 roses, its sad but good. "Stay strong and always move forward, no matter how hard it is leaving the things you left behind". For your question about one of my poems, its true, it was or aniversary and I cought her with her best (guy) friend of all her life (sucks.. very). It nearly killed me (literally).

well writen and powerfull.
Emma

Yeah i love this once again. great poem.. you write so deeply and I love it