The Sixth Sense

"...An ice...nestled in an evergreen curve..."
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[honestly, I like the begining, it's pretty strong and kind of drags you in.]

"Beneath...the evanescence...cloudless mist..."
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[Now, here, I don't like the word "evanescene", but I do like the rest. That's solely my opinion, of course, but that's that. :).]
"...A silhouette...slides...whispers...sees..."
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[This line, apart from the rest, isn't as good as them. Like, it doesn't stick out as the others does; the words are too cliche together and take it down.]
"Light fades...asleep...an echo...in silence..."
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[A little bit of the same here, but i like the "an echo.. in silence" part.]
"...Eyes...glance towards...a paled mirror..."
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[I really like this line. I'm not sure why, maybe because of the description of a "paled mirror", but I like it.]
"I know...For they understand...The nudeness...of shelter"
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[This is a wonderful ending. It really pulled everything in and it was beautifully worded. Overall, it's very well written. Nicely done. :).]
xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

Interesting and unique. Sounds like it should be read in a scarey movie. I think it is creative and unique. I just don't understand the pause at the beginning...you were pausing before you started...LOL! You still did a good job!

What a comeback, great poem and thats also of my fav movie, i own its dvd and must have watched it more than 10 times. Though to be honest i didnt understood the movie when i watched it for the first time but as i was with my wife i pretended good.... :)

Great poem dear, loved the way you expressed all the contradictions with so ease.

all the best and take care

Kaylee
Welcome back :) You did it with a bang!!!!
Awesome job....I love the way you have styled this one.
Excellent!
Love Cindy