Wow..I am officially scared now! Haha, its the good kind of scared though. I love the eerie feeling this piece gives off! Absolutly love it! I also completley LOVE the wording in it. Believe me when I say that it adds so much to it! Great write there!5/5

This poem is wonderfully written. Your word choice is amazing, and the way you've described the feelings and emotions in the piece. I loved it completely.

5/5

``Briana

Wow. This was excellent. Everything was worded so perfectly and the mood was definatly very dark and kind of creepy, in a way. I really want to read this book now, it seems like just reading your poem based off the book.. it seems like a very suspenseful book. This write couldn't have been better, the word-choice was amazing and everything was described perfectly. This poem also held a little of imagery too, which was great. Lots of poetic things in this poem. Keep writing. I enjoyed. 5/5.

Wow! I must admit to the envy I feel when i read fre verse that flows like this. Amazing!!!

I abolutly love the twlight saga. wonderful tribute. i dont know how to explain how much i love this.

I enjoyed the story line though I thought there was some item missing(perhaps my reading "Twilight" first) that would tie it all together. I am not a great admirer of "Free verse" as it mostly has little metre/rhythm these days so it reads like prose to me.
Third stanza, third line "to" to "too"(too numb to move).
as always an opinion.

This poem escalates intensely, and with it comes dark vivid imagery that kept me suspended while reading. At first the intro did not completely capture me, but as I read on I was taken the escalation of it all. Very well thought out, and overall I'd say I would enjoy the read. Great work.

Wow.
Another great piece of work.
Twilight pretty much saved me from boredom on my school holidays and this was really well collected from the book.
I loved the wording.
5/5 for sure :)
Keep it up.
xx

Awsome!
A smashing tribute to the books!
Beautifully worded.
Bella would be proud. ;)
Very well done.
Kat x

I absolutley LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE the twilight series!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you took the book and turned it into a poem and it is FABULOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! pm if you want to know more about me KM

Nice poem about twilight. I loved that book and your poem goes right along with it. Very nice. =)
Arielle
~Heart Beat Thunder~

Thats beautiful... it has a suspenseful theme... a bit scary but I like it... I like your writing style... its awesome!!! Keep it up =)

Well, this was really scary! I have to go to bed in a few..I wish I had read this earlier on..now I will be scared, lol.

Well written MaryAnne, you had my full attention from start to finish:)

Her eyes frantically search the area, terrified but open,
Scarred for what she might see, but anxious to know

^^

Did you mean to say "scared" here?

Then she sees him, his penetrating red eyes thirst,
As he playfully smiles, a sickening feeling comes to her.

^^These lines were most scary!

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid