Comments : It's Crazy

  • I can relate tot his poem as I know many others can but,I did spot a few minor mistakes that need to be fixed.

    After all the hurt that I've been through
    I Can't see my future without you
    I can't see myself getting over you
    It's crazy but it's true

    ^^In the second line 'can't' doesn't need to be capitalized.^^

    I actually cried when i thought i couldn't say i love you anymore
    I want to hear your voice once more
    I wan to feel your touch once more
    It;s crazy but i don't want my heart to be sore

    ^^I think that you should break down the first line into two different lines and change the semi-colon to an apostrophe.^^

    Loving you is so easy why couldn't getting over you be the same
    I still smile when i hear your name
    But to you, it's all a game
    It's crazy, but it stays the same

    ^^Again,I think it would be better if you broke the first line into two.^^

    You made me jump with joy
    You made smile
    You made me cry
    You made me love and i don't want to get over you
    It's crazy but i cannot stop, it's true.
    Cuz, baby, I'm crazy for you

    ^^I think that this stanza should be broken into two different stanzas like this:

    "You made me jump with joy
    You made smile
    You made me cry
    You made me love

    And I don't want to get over you
    It's crazy but i cannot stop, it's true.
    Cause, baby, I'm crazy for you"^^

    All in all though,I am going to rate this as a 5 because the emotion was great.Those are just a few suggestions.Good poem.

    --amber--

  • I can relate tot his poem as I know many others can but,I did spot a few minor mistakes that need to be fixed.

    After all the hurt that I've been through
    I Can't see my future without you
    I can't see myself getting over you
    It's crazy but it's true

    ^^In the second line 'can't' doesn't need to be capitalized.^^

    I actually cried when i thought i couldn't say i love you anymore
    I want to hear your voice once more
    I wan to feel your touch once more
    It;s crazy but i don't want my heart to be sore

    ^^I think that you should break down the first line into two different lines and change the semi-colon to an apostrophe.^^

    Loving you is so easy why couldn't getting over you be the same
    I still smile when i hear your name
    But to you, it's all a game
    It's crazy, but it stays the same

    ^^Again,I think it would be better if you broke the first line into two.^^

    You made me jump with joy
    You made smile
    You made me cry
    You made me love and i don't want to get over you
    It's crazy but i cannot stop, it's true.
    Cuz, baby, I'm crazy for you

    ^^I think that this stanza should be broken into two different stanzas like this:

    "You made me jump with joy
    You made smile
    You made me cry
    You made me love

    And I don't want to get over you
    It's crazy but i cannot stop, it's true.
    Cause, baby, I'm crazy for you"^^

    All in all though,I am going to rate this as a 5 because the emotion was great.Those are just a few suggestions.Good poem.

    --amber--