by BREEawNUHH
I really liked this piece. I thought it was written very well. The rhyming was excellent. I liked the emotion you portrayed. |
This poem was filled with so much emotion. I felt all the sadness that you portrayed. great work |
by Lizaveta
So sad. the way this story is told is so touching. lines like "she was just a lonely girl" tekk like such story isn't exceptional, it happens quite often, and that is what makes the poem so moving. |
This was was a very good poem, you did an excellent job on it. the rhyming was done well, and the flow was good. this was filled with emotion and pain. and i loved how the last stanza wrapped things up. 5/5 |
by Austin
Well done. I can't complain as much as I did on your other poem, because you did much better in this one. Good job. This was supposed to be a little sad, but still made me laugh a little. Ambitious people and beer....never leads to anything good. haha 5/5 |
by smiley
I love it !! It good |
by smiley
I love it !! It good |
by benjamin
"She saw him across the room, |
Alright. |
by Malachi
Crap, this makes me wanna cry, but I loved it so much! You really have a way with words and well, I am just envious of how awesome you write. It flows so well and makes me happy! Although it was sad, it was really well written and I won't ever forget it! |