by The Lonely Rose Jul 19, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
There will always be a momment where I will lie and wish, |
by Rin
Good job girl... |
by Sourav
Poem is good but some lines are not that well measured. You can make it more compact one. |
by Yazdan
Nice poem. The line "Myself inside will die pretty soon..." sounds kinda awquard but other than that the rythm and flow is pretty good. I personaly find words like 'strive' or 'pretty' or other words with sharp consonants make thoughtful poems like this one a tad choppy. I'm not saying that any of these are huge problems, im splitting hairs here lol. I love the poem. Great job! |