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I like what you are saying in the poem, but I would have preferred you had continued not rhyming after the first 2 lines. It is a really easy for many to relate to this piece because many of us have been driven to self destructive things by pain. If you cleaned up the rhyme scheme abit, it would be easier to live with, but it is a good start. Nice work.

I purposely made the title different from the message I think the title fits itself because you go into it thinking your going to get one thing and you get another

This was amazing and so sad, I loved it. Very well written XD!

Another great poem. I like your writing style. I've only read a couple of yours, but I really enjoy the titles, as well--they're creative and original.

"Scratch my back and I will stab you in yours
I want to break the trust that's instilled in me by others
I suppose it's just another self destructing habit I've accumulated"
^^^
[Wow. Alright. I'm going to tell you now, you do an amazing job when you're not trying to rhyme.
The first lines a bit, eh, but when put with the next two; wow, I really love this beginning. I think there should be a period here.. or a space; something. Give it a pause before this next line; it would set more emphasis.]

"Lying, Cheating, Substance abuse a few that can be related
to the day you walked out on me through that door
Leaving me feeling as important as the dirt on the floor"
^^^
[Ohhh. Shot down. You went cliche on me again. Remember how I said don't get personal? You did. And, "as important as the dirt floor"... Hun, with the first three lines I KNOW you can do better than that.]

"So i turn to these habits to fill the empty void
To replace the loss of love, it's all I can do to avoid"
^^^
[I like these lines.. I'm not sure why, they just were well written, I suppose.]

"Perhaps another shot will drown away the pain
or perhaps its a different shot i need to relieve this ball and chain"
^^^
[Cliche again.]

[Overall, it wasn't too bad... It started disappointing me half way through the poem because the beginning was so great and then you went cliche on me again. I knwo you can write, Alex.. But you can't force it. Don't try to rhyme; just write. Don't write what everyone else writes; write your own. You CAN do it.. I know you can. Those first three lines had me in love.]

Take care, babe.
xx.

xTheEcastasyofSuicidex 4.5

I love the similes and metatphors in this. they are very well put. i also like the title, very to the point. your writing style is very unique, no rhyme or story-like setting. just tell it how it is. nice. 5/5