I believe that writing a love poem is not as easy as writing a sad one but youve done here a fantastic job...A very sweet dedication to your bf filled with so much love and affection.

Fantastic poem. A little critique would be capitalize all the first letters because you do it for a few then stop then start again. Other than that it was great.

-Dan

This poem sounded like an immature love. Sort of like a 14 year old telling someone they liked them.
It was sweet and gentle.
The punctuation sort of halted the images
Also
You repeated words very commonly. Spread them out.
This has potential, just make it live up to it.
Some changes could be:
"to show someone what I feel toward you.
to show "
Make your repetive selections more creative. Make them stick out vividly instead of dully.
"your eyes are green and they get to me.
I love touching you, hugging you."
Describe his eyes. Describe how his touch feels.
Things like that will make this from good to amazing. =]