Oh my! I love it!! lol, i love how you can picture whats going on, and how there is so much emotion, like its not from your head, but from your heart. Like you mean it. Tell me, is this from a personal expirance? Read what I have for songs, but read the thingy i have before it.
But, I love your writing!
Taylorr.

Nice, i really felt the emotion from this
piece..if its a real life thing then i hope for
the best but honestly this did seem like a rap
for me..keep writing though ~peace~

I felt the emotion its really good.
if its real i hope the best for you.
it's really sweet.
keep going you are very talented keep going.

That is really good. You should finsih it. Alot of emotion and if it was a song that you record for all to hear im pretty sure id be the first to buy it. Its really good!

Wow, I really like this. :]
Its lyrically awesome, for lack of better words.