by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden Jul 20, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
The slick roads and lightning bolts made you crash into a tree. |
I lik the poem...and I agree wit the title |
Wow. this poem was full of sadness and so very true. things happens, and there's nothing that we can do to make it not happen or anything we can do to make anything better. things happen the way they do because they happen for a reason and yea. basically. you get what i'm saying. but anyways, this poem was great. your syllable count thing seems to be working to your advantage! your flow is sooo amazing and so smooth. dang, i wish I could rhyme like you too. your rhyme was consistant and amazing. wooow, jen. you are still improving. i loved this poem more because it was longer and said mroe in my opinion!! yaaay. just keep writing. you know you are an excellent writer. =) 5/5 |