Dead love (Senryu)

by Mr. Darcy   Jul 21, 2008


Poisoned love received
Masqueraded betrayal
Blue eyes pierced my heart

M. Moran
04.47
21.07.08

This is my first attempt at writing a Senryu. I believe this form has a syllable count of 5,7,5, over three lines. Unlike a Haiku, this form is about human nature.

Special thanks to Miss Take

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  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Thought provoking. Good job on the form. Well thought out!

  • 16 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    Nice job. very well detailed with just three lines.5/5
    **harlea

    ps. thanks for the advice u gave me. really helped alot :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Interesting. I've never heard of such a style of writing, but yet again.. you managed to do a wonderful job. Keep exploring these new styles and keep writing!! 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Goodbye

    I think this Senryu is really a good one. Last line was best of the three... I noticed every one is getting crazy about writing haikus and senryu since lovely Miss Take introduced them.. ;)

  • 16 years ago

    by ForeverASickKid

    Writing a Senryu is very hard. i have yet to master it but this is very good i personally think you nailed it!

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