Falling Into Life

by Austin   Jul 21, 2008


Drifting through water I found a note.
And on this paper the paladin wrote:
A description of hope, and a memory of fate.
Yet I paddle with fears that await.

My unsunk bottle has become my saint.
But weary I am, and still afraid.
While lightened waters are still faint,
And on dampened wood my head is laid.

My mind ponders so small and bleak
About the angels that I love,
And the savior that I seek.
But still I lay, staring above.

In one instant I realized fate,
And a sinners tear stole my glee.
I now know what must await,
as I fall into the ocean, peacefully.

(C) Austin, 2008

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  • 15 years ago

    by Meme

    I liked its tittle so I read it and its amazing
    keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by kelleyana

    I enjoyed every bit of this poem from the beginning to the end. I think it's the first poem i red of yours and surely it pushes me to continue, keep it up, kel.

  • 16 years ago

    by XxxBeenThereRockedThatxxX

    Different...but in a good way..great use of words..keep up the good writing..

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Gosh i was falling into my life,,hehe well it really captured my eye this poet, it sounds really interesting when i glancing the titled so i dont doubt to read this one, it really has a good flow, i can really feel every words that it really has a greaming i enjoyed it alot 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by x Mo x

    Yea, wow. You never disappoint.

    I really liked this poem. It too had that cryptic feel to it. It paints a picture but without flat out saying what exactly it is that is happening.

    Your rhyming skills are great and you have amazing word choice. My favorite words were "unsunk bottle" "peacefully" "hope" "dampened wood" and "ponders." Those words were the ones that painted the most in my mind. The line "A description of hope, and a memory of fate." is super genius and really brought the poem to life for me.

    Overall this poem was incredible!

    -mo-

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