Wow very chilling yet i understand where you are coming from its hard on someone when they are rejected and everyine takes rejection differently a very haunting poem but the emotion is so real so once again an amazing poem! keep it up ur way talented! xxxxxxxxxxx 5/5

Another good poem :)

This one is my favorite. Very sad. I hope that the one you love, loves you back hun.

Very good, 5/5 ^^ great job keep up the great work

Nice loved it, relatiable

Wow this love was controling. i love it . great job.

Amazing, short and yet so powerful.

Wow! I hope this is not anyone you know, and if it is this girl needs help.

You seem tend to jump in conclusion , poems are not like resume , it seem soo odd to transfer the reader from picture , of loveing him then a party then took a gun and then shoot him

i did not see the point or love or any feelings of her love in this poem ,

plus it si 1 big paragraph and you need to split and work your ryhimg , after you change the lines and add more to smoothen the place and feeling transition from place to place

Emotion is really felt through this poem. Good work! You definitely have my vote

5/5

~Chinwe~

This is good
and i can toatlly relate to this.

5/5

Awwww sad,
but VERY GOOD :)
sounds lik sumthin i wud right,
cuz i can relate
5/5
amazing job

=]

-halie

VERY DEEP!! BUT GREAT WRITING!

Dang......thats.....lol, i dont really know what to say. very good though =)

5/5

~tia

Awe so sad.
This is almost like me and my boyfriend,who just broke up with me a couple days ago! really cute!!

I liked you poem and made me think how stupid i would be just thinking of him...nice job.....8)...!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!LoSt IdEnTiTy!

Yeah, this happens to me all the time. lol

Hey, i liked this piece, it reminds me of one that i wrote but waaay longer lol, its one of those poems that ud have hoped the writer wrote more but i think its good you left it where u did cuz that makes the reader be like" a man no more?" lol so yeh good job. check out mine lemme see wat u think

HEY U R ROCK OUT LOUD I WILL GIVE U A 5 OUT OF 5 OR MORE IF I COULD

Very very intense some way with the girl and the gun.
i find it some what dark, like an evil jealousy?
good poem. tells what many people in the world feel.