by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden Jul 21, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
The last you said hello to me was on the day you died. |
by H E Losey
A very nice telling of this heart rending story. I know everyone wants to use all the emotion gabbing words but I think there are too many words in some of your lines and by cutting them the metre/flow of this piece would be wondeful and the feeling unchanged. |
Wow i really liked it i hope it didnt really happen but ur very good 5.5 |
Wow i really liked it i hope it didnt really happen but ur very good 5.5 |
by Kait
I love all of your poems. you're such a talented writer. this one was extremely emotional. great work, as always :) 5/5 |