I love all of your poems. you're such a talented writer. this one was extremely emotional. great work, as always :) 5/5

Wow i really liked it i hope it didnt really happen but ur very good 5.5

Wow i really liked it i hope it didnt really happen but ur very good 5.5

A very nice telling of this heart rending story. I know everyone wants to use all the emotion gabbing words but I think there are too many words in some of your lines and by cutting them the metre/flow of this piece would be wondeful and the feeling unchanged.
Example:
Your last "hello" to me was on the day you died.
It started as you went out for that rainy day ride.
The rain poured down, but you didn't care.
Of your dark fate you were unaware.

There are other places but if you agree you can find them or ask if you don't well it is just an opinion anyway.