The Act Of Falling.

:) beautiful poem.

"He is my light
In the darkest of my days
He is my soul
When my heart tends to give way"

very charming<3

I love the emotion through the poem.
He is my light
In the darkest of my days <-- a good beginning, the contrast emphasises how strong your love is
He is my soul
When my heart tends to give way <-- i don't really understand what you meant in these lines.... i guess it's about how supportive he is for you, don't know. not very clear but perhaps it's just me.

I'm falling in midair
Hoping he'll be down below <-- my fav part. The image of motion and movement you create is great, really expresses trust and love
To catch my broken heart
And mend it once more <-- nice idea, but this "once more" seems to annoy me somewhy.... it feels like you wrote it only to ryhm. maybe you could find another ryhm, e.g. "mend it with glow" - not perfect i know, just a suggestion.... you decide:)

I want him to be my only
To be here forever; my only wish
Catch me darling; for I am falling
Your the only name on my list <-- this part is pretty common. sweet though; the only thing i don't like is that from the beginning of the poem you were talking about "him" and now "you" appears till the end of the poem. Maybe you could change "he-s" to "you-s"in first stanzas? i think it would be more accurate, because the appeals like "catch me darling" add something sweet to your poem.

I want you to love me too
Forever;Endlessly
I want to be your girl
All you have to do is catch me <-- pretty nice ending. not something to make me go awwww, but finishes the poem nicely. i like that in all the stanzas you mention movement - fallinf and catcging.
4/5

This was good, but I don't think it was the best I've read from you. I mean, of course the point was to get the point across that you were falling for someone and you wanted them to catch you and mend your broken heart.. I guess there wasn't much more to say because the topic is kind of small.. I just didn't think it was the best that I've seen from you. But definatly I can relate to falling someone so hard and wanting them to catch me and love me. 5/5.

Normally ive noticed writing a love poem is quite different than a sad poem..As for me i write expressively when its all bout sad poems and stuff...But in this piece youve done it with ease..Its a rather cute and sweet poem filled with love and inspiration..The ending was nice although i think the last line was a bit off but overall you did a fantastic job..

"He is my light
In the darkest of my days
He is my soul
When my heart tends to give way"

^^ I quite liked the opening stanza. It was beautifully written.

"I'm falling in midair
Hoping he'll be down below
To catch my broken heart
And mend it once more"

^^ Hm. I think the rhyming in the second/fourth line is off. Though, as I was reading it, it didn't seem to bother the flow. It still works.

"I want him to be my only
To be here forever; my only wish
Catch me darling; for I am falling
Your the only name on my list"

^^ I liked this stanza a lot. It was very well written. The only thing; in the fourth line - "your" should be "you're".

"I want you to love me too
Forever;Endlessly
I want to be your girl
All you have to do is catch me"

^^ A wonderful way to end the piece. I thought it was very sweet. But in the second line, I think "Forever;Endlessly" should have a space -- "Forever; endlessly".

5/5

``Briana