very cool poem my friend, I totaly dug the way it ended too, Im checking out more than one of your poems. keep up the good work.

Good poem. Just a quick aside--The way I usually comment on poems is to do grammatical errors first, then criticism, but remember that I wouldn't comment if I didn't like your poem, okay?-- Anyways, the word 'secret' was spelled incorrectly. I think that was in the last stanza. I thought the poem was rhythmically sound, but there were a few spots that I had trouble with, particularly near the beginning of the second and third stanza (I think those are the ones). I really enjoyed this poem, and I thought that your use of repitition and a topic I could relate to made this poem work very well for me. Good job!

excellent poem I loved and enjoyed my read
Cathy