Mommy Daddy Where Did You Go Wrong

by SilentSuicide   Jul 23, 2008


Mommy daddy why are you up
I can hear your yelling from my room
Your going to wake baby brother up
I hope you end this soon

Mommy why are you crying
Why does daddy look so mad?
Am i at fault? Am i to blame?
It's never been this bad.

Daddy where are you going
Come back inside.
Mommy left to the bathroom
maybe to run and hide.

Mommy what are you doing there?
I'm opening the door
Mommy what is all of this stuff
Scatted across the bathroom floor?

Why are you throwing up
Mommy are you okay?
Why did you just stand up
And push me out of the way.

What is this stuff on the floor?
Bottles? a drink?
If mommy drank it so should i
Maybe it will make them think.

Mommy come back
Why did you leave
Take me and baby brother
He'd be awake i believe.

Are we looking for daddy?
Mommy your going to fast
Baby brothers crying
God i hope this doesn't last

Mommy have we stopped?
This is where daddy is i bet
Mommy you parked so bad
And Ive picked up a sweat

Mommy go get daddy
Why did you stop at his car?
Mommy don't bang on that!
Your taking this too far

Mommy look a man
Hes coming to help you
"GET JIM" mommy yelled
This all cant be true.

Here comes daddy
His eyes are red
Daddy your scaring me
I'm better off dead!

Hi daddy why did you leave?
Whys Mommy's eyes so blood-shot?
Daddy stop yelling at mommy
This is such a tight spot

Daddy, your driving the car?
Mommy's in the back seat
There is no ending this madness
Mommy i accept defeat.

Mommy daddy I'm going to bed
stop your fighting for a while
I have to shut my door now
i can hear you through the aisle

A knock at my door?
who could that be?
Baby brothers not such a baby.
Of course you can sleep with me.

The screams wont die
baby brother hold on tight
I can feel a storm coming
and it's going to last all night

Minutes seem like hours pass
another bang at my door
Daddy? whats wrong
Eyes red as he swore.

Daddy i don't know where mommy is
stop yelling at us
baby brothers crying again
daddy stop with all this fuss!

Mommy ran away
She wont get far
Daddy's looking for her
Inside Mommy's car

Baby brother let's go to sleep
maybe mommy will be back tomorrow
Tonight has been a bad night
My heart feels hollow

Mommy daddy where did you go wrong
I gaged while you where gone
for what i thought was my fault
was yours all along.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Excellent work

    This poem touch my heart :)

    I love it, keep up this good work (4/5)

  • 16 years ago

    by Needer of You

    Filled with emotion. Brings people back to the cold, bitter world. Brings out the feelings. Sad and good strategy. The words flow out naturally. And very professional.
    The best poem I ever read on this site!

    5/5 Keep it up and keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Faithless Watermelon

    I think this was certainly filled with emotion and it seems as though it was fresh in your head, or you have a vivid memory of the event.

    To me this dragged on a good deal more than it really needed to. The point had come across about halfway through, and the rest just made me go "WHEN WILL IT END?!"

    I think this is because of the repetitive "Mommy Daddy" thing, which I get the feeling was part of the effect, but there's such a thing as over-acting in the world of literature too. I did love the last stanza though, although you spelled gagged wrong. 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Katie

    I love this for the sympathy it evokes in the reader. Few poems can actually make me feel something toward the narrator or the subject. Keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    This poem is so filled with emotion , it's almost hard to read . It's good when someone who can understand what someone went through when they'd usually have no idea at all .

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