This is truly a very sad poem, and I can see you wrote this straight from your heart, and that is really all that counts. In some places the flow was off, but still, I really liked this poem, and how you wrote it. It really portrayed the fear you were in during this. I hope this isn't true, otherwise that would be just horrible. Well, anyway, nice job with this one, its very sad and heartfelt. Keep writing!

Very easy rhyme to follow ,yet the content and theme stand out. The emotional overtones kept me glued. The write expressed well that tramatic effecct of perental disputes and acting out have on the offsprings

well done

Your rhythm wasn't hard to follow so the length didn't bother me. The poem has a very sad tone to it, and I'm sure you vented a lot of emotion while you wrote it. I think it is great that you put this into writing the way did because it worked out well in the end. Great work.

This is one truly sad poem and yet the emotions expressed through it are very strong. I couldn't stop reading till the end... I hope it didnt really happen, but even if it did, expressing it all out was a job well done in ur poem...... All in all, it is a great write :).

This was such a sad poem, especially since you wrote it from a child's point of view with all the "mommy's" and "daddy's". I don't think some parents really understand how much their fighting effects their childern, but it hurts them a lot. I know from personal experience. The flow to the was good, even though a bit simple, but at least there were not awkward pauses. :] It kept my attention the whole time, and I didn't mind that it was long. I've read wayy longer anyways, so don't worry about it.

This was a good poem, very emotional. I hope everything is okay. :]

Keep writing!
Cayce

Wow this is sucha sad poem, but i loved it. I love how you expressed the story from the eyes of a confused troubled child. The rhyming was pretty good, but some times it didnt flow as well as it could have. You kept me hanging on to your every word of every second of that poem. Overall it was really great. A well deserved 5/5

A sad poem, especially how it is written in the voice of a child. I think it could be improved though if you tweaked the lines so that they were more or the less the same length as each other - then it would flow better and get a better rhythm. Other than that I really like it. Polly

That was beautifully sad, i loved it. :)

This is a long one, but it tells a story that I can definitely relate to. Hang in there!

`Tia

This poem is so filled with emotion , it's almost hard to read . It's good when someone who can understand what someone went through when they'd usually have no idea at all .

I love this for the sympathy it evokes in the reader. Few poems can actually make me feel something toward the narrator or the subject. Keep writing!

I think this was certainly filled with emotion and it seems as though it was fresh in your head, or you have a vivid memory of the event.

To me this dragged on a good deal more than it really needed to. The point had come across about halfway through, and the rest just made me go "WHEN WILL IT END?!"

I think this is because of the repetitive "Mommy Daddy" thing, which I get the feeling was part of the effect, but there's such a thing as over-acting in the world of literature too. I did love the last stanza though, although you spelled gagged wrong. 4/5

Filled with emotion. Brings people back to the cold, bitter world. Brings out the feelings. Sad and good strategy. The words flow out naturally. And very professional.
The best poem I ever read on this site!

5/5 Keep it up and keep writing!

Excellent work

This poem touch my heart :)

I love it, keep up this good work (4/5)