Awaiting Midnight~Tanka

by Poet on the Piano   Jul 23, 2008


The crescent moon hides,
Black shadows slyly creep up,
Twilight is nearing.
What a silent atmosphere,
As the earth quietly sleeps.

*The Tanka is a form of Japanese poetry that consists of the following syllables: 5, 7, 5, 7, 7. *

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  • 16 years ago

    by Christopher Hantman

    This is very short but also creates a great imagery.

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Nice except the last line is seven syllables and a Tanka has the same syllable count as a Haiku or Senyru 5-7-5. Maybe you could just say Earth quietly sleeps.....

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats on your win :)
    Take Care
    Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Wow so much imagery in only five lines
    you didn't use ordinary words and that helps draw the reader in you have to think more
    5/5 <33

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    You have managed to richly describe the brink of late night into early morning. A wonderful moment to observe and one to write about.

    A good write, well done

    Michael

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