by BlueEyedMystery Jul 24, 2008
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
Step through the incandescent light, |
by Lonely Rider
This is so beautifully written... I gives such a feel-good feeling... motivating to remove all our inhibitions and be carefree and happy... like we used to be when we were kids... |
Sounds like a place I want to be in. Good word flow and image. |
by Lakota
OMG!!! The imagery was FANTASTIC!!! Every detail, it was...wooooow!!!! 10/5 man^^ |
by Angel Tears
This was extremely well written! I loved the imagery in it, it completely brought my imagination to life. The title also grabbed my attention, so a very nice choice on it. 5/5 |
by KN
Wow. I don't think I'll be able to help you out because I love it the way it is. Incredibly descriptive, nice flow. The images you create seem very soft and mystical. And I would have to agree with Empathy that the last line seems just right to sort of pull it to an end with a subtle abruptness (sorry if that doesn't make sense). |