Oooh, I love dark poems, Kris! ^.^ They're my favorite kind, for some reason I just can't seem to write good happy poems. T.T That's got to mean something. >.> Lmao. Anyways..

I find myself trapped in a dream,
I feel like I'm stuck, stuck in between.
I notice that I've been here this very theme,
I know that I know this one very scene!
`` o.o Oh my gosh. Too. many. I's. Seriously though. I liked this stanza, except allll the I's ._. They're over-whelming. Try writing it like this:

I find myself trapped in a dream,
feeling like I'm stuck in between.
Noticing I've been to the very theme,
knowing that I know this very scene.

Just a suggestion though, it's your poem. ^.^

To kill him is to embrace him!
To embrace him is to love him!
To love him is to forgive him!
To forgive him is to be with him!
`` I looove this stanza. You've gone from killing him to being with him. Haha, it kind of tricks your mind.

Thus for him to be home in a hole,
He finds himself stuck Between Mind and Soul!
`` Good ending. :]

Looveded iiit, Krisss.

Hey can I call you Krissy? o.O
I have this urge to, like really bad.

Cayce xx

Wow, i love it ! and my favorite part is the last stanza.

-Brittney

Awesome Poem keep up your good work 5/5

OMG Kris i loved it!!! i really liked the second stanza the best though!!! the ending rocked though... really loved it!!! and omg you should let Cayce call you Krissy!! hehe

I think this is a great poem. It is sad, but you write very well and describe your sadness nicely. 5/5

So I really like this poem. I'm also a little confused. Could be because i'm kinda sleepy lol but it is very good.

Im speechless! amazing work! 5/5

I luv the way u write .. its really strong ...
this is a cool poem .. keep it up wolf :P

BY far my favorite poem!!!i loved this. its so vivid and deep. fantastic!!!

victoria