The first line reminds me of a song from Lizze Mcguire [sp?] ><

Anyways, I think it's a good start. I think you need to go into detail about the fight, though. What was it about? What was said? Were thing thrown? Was there yelling? We're left out and don't know what happened. o.O

Other than that it was good. ^.^

Keep writing!
Cayce

I really like how you repeated the title because the "beautiful night" seems to create some contrast as if you wouldn't expect to be fighting at such a time. Anyways, very nice, great job!