Tears Of Blood

Actually now that I look at stanza one again you could say "Tears of blood caused by the pain, Saying I love you, was it all in vein?"

Good job once again and keep writing :) GG23

Yhis was quite a unique poem and written pretty well, although I would change some things around.

"Tears of blood caused by the pain.
Telling you i love you, was it all in vain."

Capatalize your I's always no matter what, and "was it all in vain" seems to be a question so I would add the question mark at the end.

"Tears of blood flow from my now hallow shell.You showed me Heaven, but took me to Hell."

I would change the second line for the sake of flow and say "You showed me heaven, but gave me hell"

"Tears of blood formed from the cuts you've made. The love that i felt has begun to fade."

Once again capatalize the "I" and I'd change my second line slightly and say "The love that I feel has slowly begun to fade"

"Tears of blood now letting me show.
How much pain it takes, for me to let go."

Change the second line and make it a little bit shorter.."How much pain it takes, to let you go"

Just a few suggestions to make the poem flow and stand out better, not trying to rewrite it or be mean, only trying to help :) I thought the poem was good and I gave it a 4/5..I figured you'd want me to be honest and not just butter it up with a 5/5...great job though GG23

Very good rhymed very good and had a good flow nice job

Personally I love poems that use repitition to drive home a point/meaning so I enjoyed reading this poem a lot. I'll say it again, you and dark poems belong together. You are talented at them.

The flow and rhyming was great in this poem, and it was an easy read with DEEP meaning. Well done!

Usually i dont like repetitivness but the way you used it made it a theme with this poem which i liked alot. I just wanna make a suggestion. In your second line you could say already in steady pace. but thats just my opinion nice poem^^