Noose on Your Neck

by Michael D Nalley   Jul 25, 2008


You got an annoying monkey on your back
There is a loose noose around your neck
Your crew is around you, about to attack
You're on the plank running from the deck

Your spirit feels no lighter
With the wee one on your back
The rope is getting tighter
From the control you must lack

Mutiny is the order of the day
You must have forgotten how to balance
If you fall you are washed away
In a sad sea of a chemical romance

How sweet it would have been
How bitter is the truth you see
That you fail, time and time again
In the shadow of what could be

Your ship, it has set sail
Your song, it has been sung
The monkey swings its tail
Sure that you will be hung

Was I not your first mate?
The second, or maybe the third?
All the problems we create
When a misunderstanding has occurred

You gave me fifty lashes
I pray my back will heel
When you rise from your ashes
You'll know how my pain must feel

You will be scorned for your deed
To atone for your mistake
Mercy is what you will need
You must give back what you take

With a loose noose rapped around your neck
A mad monkey on your back
Peering at my eyes, search for the speck
Your cold heart is bound to crack

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  • 16 years ago

    by she

    Gosh, i love your poetry
    this poem touched me,
    great metaphors

    You gave me fifty lashes
    I pray my back will heel
    --is heel supossed to be heal?

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by LilBit

    Wow!
    Great Poem,
    Very Interesting,
    i ♥'d It!

    5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by Bugg

    Wow! I loved the vocabulary that you used. I was blown away by it. The rhyming didn't seem forced at all. :) It was really good to say the least.

  • 16 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Excellent poem. Good use of imagery and language. The poem was structured well and the rhyming did not seem forced at all and the flow was flawless.
    One thing though, In the fifth stanza in the line, 'Your song has been sang' It should be sung not sang.

    Overall great poem. 5/5

    Take Care!
    -Shannon <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessica

    This was really goood, the vocabulary you used was great, the poem flowed really well and you could feel the emotion. i also found some lines quite amusing which was good, nice job :] 5/5

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