Opposites Attract. (Collab)

Handsome he was not, but cute in his own way.
`OHHHH THAT'S SO CUTE! I love the way that was worded. It's not the first time I've ever heard it, but actually reading it in poetry and where it fit in is just great.

Though, I don't really like the use of "princess" in both the first stanza and the second. It just bothered me since the stanzas are right after each other.

For some reason, the third stanza made me imagine chemistry becoming visible, and then the chemistry between them both transforming into butterflies in the air. Even though that's not exactly what it says--it's a pretty image :)

Though it read more like a prose than poetry, it was still so sweet. And your ending was absolutely ideal for this piece. I think it bothered me that love was used in two lines directly after each other, but I can't really think of anything to change those so, good job.

..__MiNDYY

Aw. This poem was absolutely wonderful. You guys did a great job on this.

"On one side of the room sat a popular girl,
a beautiful princess is what she was called.
Dressed in designer clothes and spoiled all her life,
never understanding why she was never loved. "

"He too, had never experienced love.
Handsome he was not, but cute in his own way.
He did not have much at all, but just enough.
All he needed now was a chance with a princess."

^^ I loved these two stanza's, because I feel like they pretty much set the scene for the poem. It's how life really is - the popular kids sit here, the unpopular kids sit there.

"From across the room he saw her,
smiling so radiantly back at him.
The everlasting chemistry between the two became visible,
which suddenly had left him with butterflies. "

^^ Wow! Wonderful word choice here. "Radiantly", "everlasting chemistry" -- beautiful.

"That boy knew he had to take this shot.
It took everything within to make it to where she sat.
He simply said hello and she sweetly replied.
And with her greeting, he knew something was about to be."

^^ This part really made me smile. Because the shy, quiet boy finally had the confidence to approach the popular girl. So many people aren't like this, IRL. It's sad.

"He was timid but managed to have a conversation,
hoping that what he said would capture her heart.
The bell then rang loudly and startled them both,
which made them realize they had to depart for the day."

^^ Aw. This genuinely upset me, because I want the relationship to work out so much [even though I know it's just a poem, lol], but they have tom leave each other for the day. :[

"They couldn't just walk away now,
for communication was finally established.
They both started to speak at the exact same time.
Numbers were exchanged and love had found its way."

^^ YAY! for love. I love when things work out this way. It makes me happy, to see others happy. Especially when the two people are complete opposites.

"The boy rushed home and picked up the phone,
only to find the popular girl he met in class on the line.
His heart dropped as she spoke those words from her lips,
"I want to take a risk with you. Let's fall in love,
And hope that it never fades, because I love you.""

^^ Aw. I love this ending. It's perfect. It's a sweet love story, and I enjoy reading love stories, because they make me happyyyy. :]

Overall; Clearly, I loved it. Everything about it was perfect. I thought the word choice was excellent, and the emotion was great, too.

Five out of five.

``Briana

Wow that was good. I liked it. :) I felt the ending was unrealistic, but that's only because love like that is hard to find.

It was a nice little fairy tale. I always dreamed of something like that. Just eye contact with a stranger and instant chemistry leading to a relationship. It was always my little fairytale. :)

Five out of five.

This was cute, and I can tell it was a collab, because I felt that some stanzas were better than others, but they were still wonderful. It was adorable in it's own way, and it was quite a "fairytale"; And I only say that because something like that would never happen in my high school. People stay in their own social groups, if you know what I mean. =/

~Kail

Oh wooww!... This is veryyy sweet and nicely done! 8)

5/5
Keep It Up!