"Have you ever peered through spiritual eyes?
To gaze far past all incarnate physical, lies?
When it seems all begins and ends with thought
That all your pain and suffering is all for naught"
^^ In the last line, you should remove one of the "all"'s, because I feel like it might confuse the reader. It did me.
However, that is the only thing I can find in this piece that I'm not too sure of. I thought it was written wonderfully. 5/5
My darkest hour before the dawn, or so it seemed
Was right before I accepted the truth to be redeemed
--yea it seems the lord always finds us in our darkest hour
Though your thoughts may be tormented and torn
To the point that you regret the day you were born
I like that a lot. There are so many people that end up hating who they are and hating their lives and it brings them to regret their parents ever creating them in the first place.