Love Is Lost

by BREEawNUHH   Jul 28, 2008


**Warning: Result of writer's block. lol.**

These tears roll down my face,
and they fall on what we used to be.
Memories; pictures and old letters,
I can't help but cry freely.

Everything hails in comparison,
to the love that the two of us shared.
I miss the days when we held each other,
those wonderful days when you cared.

I know those times have passed,
and on them, I shouldn't dwell.
But the day that you left me,
is the day that my heart fell.

Your words triggered something,
that made my heart break.
But the times that we did have,
for granted, I won't take.

I think I'll always love you,
it's something I live with.
To forget someone like you,
can only be a myth.

But everything is okay,
because I'll fall in love again.
I don't know with who,
but I'll definitely know when.

So thank you for letting go,
I'd be missing out otherwise.
I'm happy we're done,
now there are no more ties.

Briana Coulter
07/28/08

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  • 16 years ago

    by CourtneyyContageous

    These tears roll down my face,
    and they fall on what we used to be.
    Memories; pictures and old letters,
    I can't help but cry freely.

    ^ i liked this stanza, but maybe change freely, or be? i just don't feel like they rhyme properly.The second stanza is amazing, it's beautifully written.The middle stanza's were equally beautiful, nothing majorly wrong with them at al. Although, maybe it's just me, but I don't seem to like the way you ended it.I feel like he second line threw me off a little bit. It had more syllabules then most of the lines in the overall poem, threw me off for a minute. It was good. And there's always room for improvent. But it was a good job.

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Empathy

    Writer's block isn't it true, don't believe what they say out there ;)

    You've done a very good job with this poem in my personal opinion even if you may feel it isn't what you quite expected when you processed it down on paper. I am sure that you could find a multitude of ways to change any poem if you thought about it long enough, but sometimes the change isn't always necessary. I think that this poem is fine the way it is. I didn't have anything that threw me off the main point, nor did I ever feel anything that it lacked. I found that it was a rather bittersweet read, and I liked reading it. Nice work.

  • 16 years ago

    by J u l e s

    Even if you call it writters block I found it well written. It just flowed and seemed so real to me. The words just all tied together. I understood or maybe I feel I understood the meaning or the point of it. But in my view I truly thought the words and meaning were real. For it being written out of writters block, it is still good.

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Your rhymes semed to flow like the seasons and the rhythm of your heart expressed in words seemed to have soothed your spirit in this release of passion

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "Memories; pictures and old letters,"
    ``Well, if you wanted to be gramatically correct the semicolon would be a comma.

    "But everything is okay,
    because I'll fall in love again.
    I don't know with who,
    but I'll definitely know when."
    ``I loved the optimism here. :] It's always good to have.. keep that positive attitude.

    This was actually pretty good. The rhyme was consistant & flow was pretty good as well. This poem was kind of like mixed emotions, sad and happy at the same time. Great write. Well done. 5/5.

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