Comments : The Clown

  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    I enjoyed reading it. i really love the metaphor of circus, because it draws such a bright picture - bright not like colourful but bright which impresses you, makes you think, touches your feelings. I also once had an idea of writing a poem where life is shown as circus, but i didn't ever finish it=) anyways, i really understand the way you feel. feeling you are in the wrong place, strange and alien to it:

    Unusually large shoes,
    Fluffy, oversized clothes

    The the way you list things show how tired of it all you are.. the final stanza is so great. laconic, but so capacious.

    The idea of the poem is so trye. We are trying to play, to gain attention, "applause"... but in order to catch attention, we often hide who we actually are behind "Thick colorful make-up, Rainbow colored hair, A big red nose like a lollipop, Joys and laughter he shares"....
    overall, the poem is gorgeous. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by VSambulance

    It started off pretty normal. But got pretty serious towards the end. I like it.. especially the last stanza. Summed it up. :S and I'm afraid of clowns.
    Nice work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "Thick colorful make-up,
    Rainbow colored hair,
    A big red nose like a lollipop,
    Joys and laughter he shares..."
    `This was cute. I love the simile you used in the third line and it definatly helped me picture a clown, although I'm not a very big fan of them, lol. But definatly this was full of imagery!

    "Unusually large shoes,
    Fluffy, oversized clothes,
    Bright red lipstick he use,
    Clever tricks he shows..."
    `Wow, again. You are describing everything so perfectly. It's like you started from scratch and are making up what this clown looked like. This has amazing imagery!

    "Wildly amusing plays for the spectators
    to enjoy,"
    `These two lines could be joined.. as one. If there is room, that is.

    "People forget he exists,
    And that is me, the clown... "
    `Ohh, wow. I interpreted this poem the wrong way! But, you know what. I love the way you wrote this.. because you actually described a clown very well in the first 4 or so stanzas, and I was wondering the whole time .. how does this seem sad? Then when you said these two lines at the end it was like ohhh. This was a wonderful write though, I enjoyed it very much although the last few lines were sad. Good job. 5/5. :]