Well I havent been on in a while to read or comment any of ur poem. but this is good one i really really like it alot. who is it about though

Hey julia, this is really good-got a bit of constructive criticism though...

It took me a little while to read the second stanza so that it fit in rhythm, but i got it in the end-so thats ok.

In the 3rd stanza, you might try to find something to add to the last line-it needs about 4 more syllables.

in the 4th stanza, maybe add one more syllable to the last line. maybe "her tears fall down just like a song" i dont know-i think it fits better-but thats getting picky...

you gotta be careful when you put in a quote that it doesnt ruin or change the rhythm and flow of the poem-that 5th stanza has one more line and loses the rhyme-if you could fix tat up maybe-but maybe hat was on purpose-i dont know...

maybe in the 6th stanza you could change it around a liitle and have
"is there really any purpose
or a reason for your game
or is it simply for a laugh
to turn tears into rain" then you're saying the same thing but it keeps the rhyme there.

in the 7th stanza-maybe add "you laughed at" again, before "the way she looked" it fits better and repetition can be useful.

9th stanza-you switched from past tense to present tense (might have done it before in the poem too-be careful about that) so maybe "the tormenting had just begun" rather than "has just begun"

I really like what you've done though!!!!! i think it's great, you dont have to change anything but read over the suggestions and see what you think.
Hope i helped and sorry for picking it apart!!!!!!!!!!

4/5 all up.
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