Forever The Fallen

This is my personal favorite poem that has a folk depth to it

My favorite quatrain is
Walking along side the shadows
'The Invisible' as we're known
This is the anthem to anyone
Who's ever felt, alone"

It reminds me of a Dylan lyric "Walking through the leaves falling from the trees feeling like a stranger that nobody sees"

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This is very deep... wonderful write... I could feel what you want to portray here...

"Lurking around the corners of light
Waiting to find another one to fall
And show them our way of life "

^^ loved this stanza...

keep writing..

Beautifully written. You captured the emotion so well.

I thought this was very well written. Most of your rhymes worked out perfectly. I really really enjoyed the story of this poem. I think..haha I have like four ideas of what you were talking about. I over think things a lot. XD

Well done.

I really enjoyed the last stanza btw. Finished your poem nicely.

Ah! I really liked this a lot. I thought it was well written, and the rhymes were pretty good.

"Walking along side the shadows
'The Invisible' as we're known
This is the anthem to anyone
Who's ever felt, alone"

^^ In the last line, the comma is not needed before "alone".

"We'll forever be the darkness
Lurking around the corners of light
Waiting to find another one to fall
And show them our way of life"

^^ I think you should rethink "life" & "light" as rhyming words. They don't actually rhyme.

Despite those couple of things, I liked the choice of words you used in this piece, and I feel like a lot of people can relate to it. Good job. 5/5

``Briana