The forgiveness of a stereo

This poem was fantastic in many ways, for me mostly because I can relate to whats going on with you 100% When the one you love is in love with somebody else, there is no worse feeling in the world. It's always like there living out there relationship in your head and you can do nothing but watch while you put yourself through torture :( Amazing job and your words are sp true 5/5 GG23

"Gentle arms lye against her, yet so tight."
did you mean lay

"It would mean so much more if you'd lye here instead."
Same thing you mean lay?

"Nobody is here to awake me with there lips."
Should be their because the "there" you have is like a location. Like Over there.

"Thinking of the two of you, my stomachs doing flips."
Should be stomach's for my stomah is doing flips.

"Here I lye alone again listening to thunder, our song."
Again do you mean lay?

But other than that it was good.
It was very cute

Gentle arms lye against her, yet so tight.
Do you know how much I think of you at night.
Yearning with hope to be just as close to you.
Walking right past me, you have not a clue.

^^In the 1st line, "lye" should be "lie."In the 2nd line, you should have a question mark instead of a period.But,the last two lines were good.

There is a tear soaked pillow lying beneath my head.
It would mean so much more if you'd lye here instead.
To catch a glimpse of the sun radiating off your skin.
Instead I'm lying here alone, wishing I could win.

^^Again,in the second line "lye" should be "lie" but,I love the whole stanza.

Nobody is here to awake me with there lips.
Thinking of the two of you, my stomachs doing flips.
Do you see that my body aches without you to hold it?
Telling me, your hands laced are the perfect fit.

^^In the 1st line, "there" should be "their" but,again,I love the stanza.

Do you know that it kills me, wanting to be needed?
Of course you don't my heart is here alone and defeated.
Listening to that play list, my lips tremble in sadness.
The thought of the word love for you is absolute madness.

^^Flawless stanza-love it.

Here I lye alone again listening to thunder, our song.
Dreaming about the day you'll come crying "I was wrong."
Until I see you outside my window, stereo in hand.
I am here watching you, forever here I'll stand.

^^"Lye" should be "lie again but this stanza broke my heart because it sounds EXACTLY like what I'm going through.

5/5 for sure.
Keep up the great work.
-amber-

"Gentle arms lye against her, yet so tight."
`It's lie not lye. I don't know why they choose to spell it that way, but .. yeah. :]

"Do you know how much I think of you at night."
`This is a question. So, the period should really be a question mark.

"It would mean so much more if you'd lye here instead."
`Lie again not lye..

Aww, this was a sad love poem. I know the feeling of yearning for that person's love and touch and just wanting to be by them. This poem was a wonderful write. Beautiful poem, yet sad. Great work. Oh, and I loved the title you came up with, that was amazing!! It fit very well with the last stanza or so.. "Thunder" -- That song is amazing!! - Awesome job hun. 5/5.

Poetic licence, lye and your tenses spoils an excellent good poem but I am of the old school and love it when poetry is concise and grammar is perfect so hence the good I am still striving for thatg in my poems but failing sometimes miserably