Wow...very powerful.

but i hope you never take those shots <3

5/5

This poem has a dark feel 2 it a depressing mood huh the kind i lik isnt that how we all feel lik we deserve to be kiled in a way fro what weve done good job and welcome to internal sufering

I like this poem because i can relate to it alot,it shows to me like all this person wanted was love and forgiveness but nobody cares to give...give me tears in my eyes i like it

Mmm ironic no onw will be alive after the second shot :)

heheh

but in all original subject and really intresting way to put it i loved the flow with every shit i could actualy remmber and like a scene of the words pass through my eyes

sructure wise it is uniform , but it nee more work on the rhyming

soo keep working it will be a perfect on !! great work

This one is awesome i love the way its written

I like the point in this one, alot of people drink when upset which is alot better than what some people would do, 5/5. Em