Comments : Love is a Battlefield

  • 16 years ago

    by Empathy

    Very captivating read, your rhythm and flow allowed me to read the poem with such ease that I never had to stop or retrace any words in the process. A very well known and subject, and easy to relate to for many people out there I am sure. I loved the title, I thought it suited the poems theme well. Great work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    `I loved the title, that's a very common phrase.. and I'm interested to see how you`re going to use it.

    "Love is a battlefield
    And my heart is at war.
    I love you, but I can't
    I just don't know anymore."
    `Oh, I sure loved this. Your heart is at war. It's a constant battle for sure. I know how one's mind and heart battle back and forth. It sure causes confusion.

    "One one hand,
    You love me so much.
    Your kisses are impeccable
    And I shudder at your touch."
    `Great word choice -impeccable. I've literally never heard of that word before. Lol.
    `Shudder was a wonderful word too. :]

    "But I know it can't happen,
    It's a dream that won't come true."
    `Aww, live with optimism girly, you never know what may come true in life.

    Overall, a wonderful write. I have never been through the situation that you are, but I love how you used the title her. Love is like a Battlefield, it is a constant battle that is never-ending. You expressed this poem very well. I could see cleary where you were coming from. Great work. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by benjamin

    Wow
    very powerfull i loved it.. nice vocabulary to make the reader feel what you long for.. great rhyme and great words .. wonderful peice keep writing