This poem is very well done, and I can honestly say that. I really don't think you would have to change anything about it unless you find yourself that you might want to, because I was able to read through it with ease and the meanings was clearly simplistic to grasp onto. The style you wrote it in made it fun for me to read as it reminded me of a poem I wrote many years ago though I do not have it posted on here. I enjoyed reading this poem. Excellent work.

Amazing poem, 5/5 for this poem. worth reading to the end. u have ur own way in writting. i believe u do nt only write it, at the same time u insert some feelings into it.

Great job. BRAVO..........BRAVO.........

Keep writing..... =)

Clever and sophisticated in places .. keep up the brilliant work and thanks for your comment on my poem

"Stitched up with death"
Favourite line, nice work.

"I love you, dearly
He once said.
Jaded lovely
Cheating was his death."

Wonderful write! Very emotional, and heart-wrenching. Love the title. Keep writting, I love your work! 5/5

mandy :)