Picture Perfect {Contest}

by BREEawNUHH   Jul 31, 2008


I am going to paint you a picture,
to let you know exactly how I feel.
Because these feelings for you,
are a whole lot more than real.

I am going to draw your eyes,
and colour them a shade of blue.
I want to stare into them forever,
this picture will help me get through.

I'll then outline the shape of your lips,
and then I will colour them in red.
As I draw these wonderful memories,
I'll run through the words that you said.

All else will be added as I draw your soul,
for that part means more then the rest.
This picture will be absolutely perfect,
because you are everything that is best.

Briana Coulter
07.31.08

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  • 16 years ago

    by It only hurts when I think of you

    WOW THIS BEAUTIFUL

  • 16 years ago

    by Josie

    Absolutly love it 5/5 good job

  • 16 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    Brian a great metorphorical poem of love, may I add that the last stanza fail for me as you change from the imagery of the person to the soul and it detract from the flow,

    I still loved it but have another look and perhaps you will see what aI mean, Ray
    5/5
    PS I will not suggest a final verse but I have some ideas: yet it stands okay as it is.

  • 16 years ago

    by Empathy

    A very lovable poem that contained heartfelt imagery and fantastic flow. You can clearly intake the deep feeling of love within this poem and the meaning comes very soft and simplistic. The structure was overall very well done and the picture should I say was painted quite perfectly indeed. I do not mean for that to sound trite in anyway whatsoever. I think that you took an applicable amount of time and thought with this poem and I found it to be a very enjoyable read. Excellent work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sole

    5/5 for sure. This is a beautiful poem and I know it sounds cliche and everyone says it, but I feel this way about someone and it just made me think of him throughout the poem, I loved every second of it, the rhymes were perfect and what a beautiful picture you painted in my head.

    Amazing poetry, I hope you continue to write and awe us all.

    Sole x

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