Comments : HAVE YOU HEARD THE CHILDREN

  • 16 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    Well I think this sums up children nicely! If I may be Mr Picky for a moment though?

    "As they go outside to run, about and play."

    The punctuation left me stumbling a little. I re-read it with the comma moved:

    "As they go outside, to run about and play."

    I also think you could capture their inherent humour by having:

    "As they go outside, to run, laugh, and play."

    Just my two pen'eth! It's still a lovely poem.