1st. Stanza.
It seemed like you were saying the same thing in every sentence just with different words and the the synonoms you used seemed forced. It was kind of a weak opening so I know you can work on it and make it stronger. Just read over it and tap into your heart and I know you can do it.

2nd Stanza.
I loved the emotion here and the insight on how you think of him. Kinda like remembering how you felt and how its not like that anymore. You used "maybe" a little too much it threw off the flow for me.

3rd. Stanza
This whole stanza seemed awkward to me. Like I know what you were tyring to say but it didnt come out write and was worded weirdly.

"Those butterflies you gave me, no longer endure."
^That needs to be revised, I understand the meaning behind it but the way you worded it didnt make sense.

4th Stanza.
I like this stanza. Overall it was good and there would be nothing I would change to it,

5th Stanza.
The meaning and emotion behind this was great but I think you should reword it. Again the organization of the words didnt make sense. It was all over the place and didnt really flow.

6th Stanza
I loved this stanza. Perfect. Leave as is.

7th Stanza,
AMAZING ENDING. DO NOT CHANGE THIS. Very strong way to end it. Now if you open this strongly it would be amazing.

I was honest so I hope you dont take any offense to what I said. I say it because I know you can do better.

DiZ POEM WAS WRiTTEN REALLy WELL,
ii dNT USUALLy LyK FREE-VERSE BUT DiZ ONE WAS REALLy GOOD.
ii WOULd CHANGE ANyTHiNG ABOUT iT.
ii CCAN REALLy RELATE TEW iT ANd ii KNOW ALOT OF OTHER PEOPLE WiLL BE ABLE TEW TEW =D
5/5

This really wasn't one of your best. I was actually sort of disappointed. There were a lot of "I"s and I felt like there was too much telling instead of showing. The emotion was there, but it didn't really jump out enough. Like you're telling everything like it is and it was more just a paragraph of a letter that you broke sentences into parts and made them verses.

As I reread it though, there are some of the blatant lines that I actually found extremely useful and powerful.

It hurts me to know that I liked you,
and unexpectedly got nothing in return.
`Like there. You say unexpectedly got nothing in return. It shows a confidence in a relationship that didn't exist yet, and many girls need that now-a-days. Guys, too. We always bring ourselves down, hoping for the worst and normally getting it -- it doesn't hurt so much. But you show confidence, which makes it hurt all the more when you don't get what you expect. It's quite clever, actually.

I think that I'm meant for someone else,
who can give me more than what you could.
`These lines show such strength, it's amazing. Getting over someone and being able to actually say this straight out about them and to them is a huge step. Whether intentional or not, you're sort of insulting them, saying they couldn't provide enough to keep you with them. And it makes me smile :)

So overall, it could've been written better. I think it was because of lack of imagery and metaphor and I normally LOVE imagery and metaphor ... so I'm being sort of biased.

It was a good, but not GREAT poem.

Keep it up though, because I know you have more masterpieces as opposed to your previous ones coming ;D

..__MiNDYY

Aww sweet poem hun. u showed all ur emotions for this guy in here. great job and keep writing 5/5
**lesthat

I really do feel the free flow in this poem, and believe a reallity check can be very romantic
I can find noyhing to change about this well written free verse that flows straight from the heart
5/5

Mkayy. I don't like love poems, but this one wasn't completely horrible. It held my intrest, and it made it personal. It's hard to let go of someone you love, or maybe thought you loved. I've had to do it and I'm sure a lot of other people have too. So this poem was very relatable which is good. :]

If I was going to change anything I'd put more lines in it like the one below. Just because I think it adds more interest and metaphors, which makes the reader think.

Those butterflies you gave me, are lost.
`` I love this line. It adds a hint of uniquness.

Well considering I don't like love poems at all, I think this was a pretty good one. You got across to the reader exactly how you felt.. and I loved how there was tiny bit of hope still lingering in the atmosphere even when it was so sad and depressing.

Great job!

Keep writing!

.||CAYCEE||.

It sad that we always have to realize later how we're not meant for that one person we cared so much about. But it does good to know that we would one day find someone who will treat us right in the end.

Love how many girls can relate to this poem, it will help lots of girls to realize what their worth! :D

take care -n- keep it up!