Firstly; after giving this piece a once over, I cannot remember the time I've read something so beautifully written.

"Burn-stained wings
sing through angel's eyes
(of death.)
Lacing futures through
deafening screams."

-- I can totally picture, or hear, this being read. The words say so much, but everything is so calm and serene. And I must say I love how this piece doesn't follow a particular form. You know, the typical four-lined stanza's.

"--sober.
Mumbling stutters lose
circling memories,
as midnight stars
(surrender)"

-- I love the way you began this, I really feel as though it makes it stand out as something.. intriguing [spelling?].

"What--
Dangling whispers
forever wither
(triumphant)
over lost visions."

-- Ah! You've selected the most amazing words. It's almost as if.. I can see those "dangling whispers", which might make no sense, since you can't technically "see" whispers. Haha. But it's beautiful, nevertheless.

"(fragile)
Delicacy's laughter
sound faint tonight.
--evermore
intentionally wandering."

-- This is stunning. ["evermore". I've always enjoyed that word.] Hm. Just a thought, though -- "sound" - should this be "sounds"? Maybe not, and I definitely do not feel in any way whatsoever that that one word could take away from the brilliance of the poem.

Overall; I'm amazed at this piece. You have a wondeful talent, and I know this might sound dumb or whatever, but I really hope writing is something you're interested in persuing possibly as a career, because you are a wonderful writer, for sure. [and this is not meant to.. "flatter", but rather to simply give you a compliment, that is well deserved, might I add. :)]

Five out of five.

``Briana

When I read this poem I felt a very deceptive sense to it, where I thought I might know the meaning but then I would change my mind. I thought that was a good thing though because it makes me think, and also allowed myself to realize that this poem could extend to various interpretations which makes it truly versatile.

Once I adapted to the writing formality of this poem I actually liked it quite a bit because each stanza has it's own unique slide of imagery that escalates as the poem progresses. I thought it was written very well, and I really like the thoughts that are portrayed throughout this poem. Excellent work.

I like the writing format and the imagery is fantastic throughout the piece. It's one of those poems where every reader will take away something completely different from it's meaning, something that is often hard to accomplish. Nice work 5/5 GG23