Floods of Tattoo Dreams

by BrokenREALiTy   Aug 1, 2008


And your pale fingers never actually seem to turn the key;
This lock I fight is forever toyed with and stained,
by the many scrapes that your hesitation has caused.
At first, I'd have become enraged by your actions,
(or lack of any, if we're going for a little accuracy here.)
Though, given the circumstances of our drought,
I'm not surprised that you remain without tears.

The infallible repute of your wretched lies exceed you,
just as my tastes have finally grown to rise past us--
My blind eyes give vision now, and it most saddens me,
that I make such effort to embed only a mundane memory.
But unlike the perforated lungs that lay murdering your heart,
your tongue just never seems to slow down.

Though I'm hoping that in the next ten minutes or so,
you'll finally talk too fast and bite yourself in the arse.
(God knows it'd save me a mint and a stick of gum.)
But hey, you can always choke on your jagged words some more,
before swallowing becomes too hard because your lies
poked too many holes as they traveled down your throat.

It's such a shame that it's come down to this:
You'd think that after the first few times, you'd have learned,
that without a brain in that hollow socket of yours,
you shouldn't go jumping off of cliffs without a life jacket--
And maybe a helmet to protect the only thing you have going for you:
The reflection of a beauty that never would've happened anyway.

But who am I to destroy your hopes and dreams?
(the same way you tried to eradicate mine.)

©20080801 Mindy Huang

*I didn't know which category it belonged in :L

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  • 16 years ago

    by MorbidCupcake

    Wow really really good
    I love how bitter it is and the fact that they didnt hold back at all
    It makes it more real

  • 16 years ago

    by Strange and Beautiful

    You are such a wonderful poet.
    You should publish your own poetry book.
    You write with so much passion and you super great at it. I love the emotion you put into your poems, and the words you use.
    You poetry is really appreciated by me.
    You are truely a great writer!!!!!
    Anyway this poem is great!
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    A very well written poem, with deep feelings portrayed. I feel so much bitterness in your words, this person must have hurt you pretty bad...

    Take care and thanks for the nomination:)

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    This poem was one of the better poems I've read on here so far this past week or so. I can relate to it myself and I think we all can when it comes to deceit and lies. Some of us learn from our mistakes and others get caught up in the whole situation and never seem to recover from there loses. Excellent write and a for sure 5/5 GG23

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Ooh this title just captured my attention and I had to read it!

    1st Stanza.
    I just adored the first line here because it just lured me in with its flawless imagery and beauty behind words. I could the your heart damaged by this love you want to work but it seems to be one-sided. The part about hesitation touched my heart because I could relate with it immensly. LOVED your use of imagery here, it had me anxious to read more.

    Though, given the circumstances of our drought,
    I'm not surprised that you remain without tears.
    ^I loved how this flowed off my tongue. It seemed so effortless and held such power and meaning.

    2nd Stanza.
    Hmm this stanza I have mixed feelings about. Your choice of words were superb but it felt like you forced them in there. It didnt really flow you know? After reading the stanza a couple of times with pauses I do understand the full meaning behind it but after reading it once I was left.."huh" Maybe thats just me but I dont this stanza was iffy for me although your imagery was flawless.

    3rd Stanza.
    AHHH AMAZINGGG.

    "But hey, you can always choke on your jagged words some more,
    before swallowing becomes too hard because your lies
    poked too many holes as they traveled down your throat."
    ^The image of this in my mind was flawlesssss. You described this so beautifully I was left ine awe! WOW. Noting left to say but I'm speechless.

    4th Stanza.
    The metaphorical writing here blew me away! Beautifully said my dear. Phrases like "life jacket" and "hollow socket" held such meaning. Loved it all from beginning to end.

    The ending was perfect. Tied everything in flawless.

    Well done my dear.
    *5/5*

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