Well...
See... the theme is very good. Very thought provoking. I personally like this concept.
You've given it a good try to explain. Somewhat it's good. But what lacks in your piece is few grammatical mistakes. That is making the poem less interesting. You should edit this one.

I love this. it is so true. i love how it just all flows. beautiful!

5/5

I like the possitive part of your message, but the poem's mostly really pessimistic, and you don't really say why, or what you think is so evil . . . and the ends a little cliche. i'm not gonna vote on this one, cause I can't really give it a four or a five. overall, i would recomend staying away from cliche's and generalizations

This flows so well, and its true. I liked this poem alot. Keep it up. 5/5

I like this poem. i agree that the flow is actually a little off but the message makes up for it. i think this poem has real potential if you tweak it a little :) but 5/5 for now anyways cause its still really good.