Hmm.

When you say things like "if it is what I think it is" you need to have rhytm or the reader gets a bit lost in the poem, from the beginning.

My main piece of advice, however, would be to chose something more original to write about.
Or chose some metaphors to say them through, so it's a little more exciting and fresh.
[if this doesn't make sense, feel free to PM me].

Back to the poem; 4th-8th stanzas, they were easy to read and pretty well formed.

Keep writing, 4/5

jess ~

Intesting subject. I liked the originality of this poem. The questions and answers were good and it was easy to understand. The flow was spot on. I thought some of the words used were a bit colloquial [Sp?] but they also seem to fit, because it's written from the perspective (Perhaps?) of a conversation, or a letter to one of the two..

Great write, Sole x