Comments : White Rose, Red Sails

  • 16 years ago

    by Montse

    The white spray from the sea hides my tears, but
    no the sorrow inside.
    this stanza really demonstrates the
    pain which is felt inside.

  • 16 years ago

    by Montse

    The white spray from the sea hides my tears, but
    no the sorrow inside.
    this stanza really demonstrates the
    pain which is felt inside.

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Well a long poem again. I think to improve this you should work on the structure of the poem. Also try to refrain from using a lot of I's in the poem coz it sometimes messes up the flow.