Hmm. alright.
so i like this whole optimistic edge that you've decided to go with, obviously. but it's just..idk. the flow got off in a few places and that bugged me ((did you know i am picky??)) and it just isn't your best piece. granted, i love it. but that's because it's a jesse poem and that in itself is an explaination.

The cliched broken lamp
That you knocked down in the hall
Unlike this cliche here
Hot glue can't fix my fall

^^ so i kinda sorta adore this stanza bit thing. it just...idk about the lamp reference. i missed that. but i adore the last line. it's just..how i feel a lot of the time. *nods*

good job. ^.^