You could really feel the urgency in the words. i reallyy reallly liked it.

Wow that was really deep! really sad! but u did an awesome job the way you worded it and the rhyme scheme was perfect! the words u used set the proper tone! wow great job! 5/5

You kind of wandered away from the poem's stanza structure at the end, but content-wise, except for the confusing part where the reader may think you are talking to a friend or a b/f, this is a very good poem.

If you need an ear im there. Awesome poem.